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I like watching the hints of your skin as they pass me by.

From me they draw a low, hungry whine.

From me they provoke my envy, my desire.

I wish I could imagine you.

Honestly I find it terribly hard to do so.

Honestly I find it so hard to hold on to.

This illusion as it melts into reality.

As the water drips down my skin,

Along my lips,

Making them burn, making them twitch.

My legs still tremble with the weight of this reality.

My wrist cracks with the strain of my hold.

To whom my heart is meant for.

To whom this poem is told.

I just want you to know that I...

Yes I...

I found someone, who I want to fall in love with.

Someone far,

Someone near.

Who's lips are tinted chrome with metal and rings.

Who's hands are adorned with bracelets and rings,

Who's body is painted over with darkened shattering wings.

Forget what I told you and whose picture I hang upon the wall.

I am only here now, to speak to you these lines.

These verses of lies.

They lay shattered and broken although those words are the same.

I lay glued to the wall.

By body trapped against the surface.

My heart raking against the ceiling.

And my nails, clawing into my flesh.

I will be yours tonight

Just give me a moment, let me get my chair.

Let me pull up my dyed lightened hair.

Let me show you the place I lived before.

How does it taste, dear?

The poison as it slides down your throat.

How does it feel love?

Does it feel cold? Full of my endless heartache.

Filled with my unspeakable rage.

You forget...

Hell hath no fury,

On a spineless broken toy such as yourself.

I will lay back against my wall.

Glued to the chipping alabaster walls.

Pressed inside the broken thoughts of my lovers.

And hidden within a slowly draining heartache.
:icondarkphoenixincarnate:

Author's Comments

...this is crap.

Had potential.

killed it half way in.

CRAP D:

...Btw working on curiouser and curiouser...SOON MY DEARS!! SOOOONNN!!!

(EDIT)
...Okay, maybe it's not THAT fricken bad....It's ...okayyy...I still don't like it too much...Then again it's better then the LAST one "Letters"

...Seriously that one sucked anus.

@____@;;;;

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:iconflowertone:
    Beautiful words, Jenn.
    They're not crap. D:<


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:icontailscoolio:
*Facepalm* One of these days i'm gonna have to give you a self-esteem injection...

"Who's hands are adorned with bracelets and rings,
Who's body is painted over with darkened shattering wings."
~Not only does that part flow so well, but the imagery in it is just plain beautiful :love:

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:iconcrazymentalchick:
wow:wow: this is really good!!!! =D totally amazing!!!:clap:
:iconmelodiousroseduelist:
I love it up until this line: They lay shattered and broken although those words are the same.

Then it gets weird for some reason and doesn't do anything for me like the first half did. The first half is like more powerful or something, I dunno, my other ear's starting to hurt now.

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:iconkillerinsane:
Well... I liked it. :3

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:iconkakyu-curoryu:
O...M...J...

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:icondarkphoenixincarnate:
....O m j? ...XD WHAT DOES THAT MEAN?

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[link] ...Axel, you sound like a pedo.

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:iconkakyu-curoryu:
Lol...I watch Naruto, if you know anything about Naruto, or Hidan, It would make sense.

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